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Korean Speakers: Help with my Eunha Fan 'Art'

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For Eunha's birthday I'm planning on making something that will contain a kind of Korean poetry called a sijo that works in both English and Korean. Basically every line is 14-16 syllables, with each line split into two phrases.

I was hoping some Korean speakers could take a look and let me know if the poem makes sense in Korean (and seems to mean the same thing in both languages), or if there are any changes I should make to the  한글 to make it work better.

English

	The galaxy sparkles with beauty, cold in its immensity			9/7 = 16
	But our Galaxy is smol, adorable, sexy and cute				7/8 = 15
	Spreading her happiness in song, forever buddies we will be		8/8 = 16

 

Korean

은하계는 아름답다, 그러나 차갑고 크다
우리 은하는 작다, 귀엽다, 섹시, 귀여운

노래로 행복을주는, 영원한 친구 우리는

 

English I Googled Translated into Korean

	The galaxy is beautiful : but is cold and large				8/8 = 16 korean syllabic blocks
	Our galaxy is small : adorable, sexy, cute				7/8 = 15 korean syllabic blocks
	Giving happiness with song : eternal buddies we are			8/8 = 16 korean syllabic blocks

 

Notes:

  • I translated each 'phrase' (between colons) separately, I'm not sure at what granularity I should translate poetry :( 
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I am good at making puppy noises - Eunha @ 18:15

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3 hours ago, strawberry_an_banana said:

For Eunha's birthday I'm planning on making something that will contain a kind of Korean poetry called a sijo that works in both English and Korean. Basically every line is 14-16 syllables, with each line split into two phrases.

I was hoping some Korean speakers could take a look and let me know if the poem makes sense in Korean (and seems to mean the same thing in both languages), or if there are any changes I should make to the  한글 to make it work better.

English


	The galaxy sparkles with beauty, cold in its immensity			9/7 = 16
	But our Galaxy is smol, adorable, sexy and cute				7/8 = 15
	Spreading her happiness in song, forever buddies we will be		8/8 = 16

 

Korean


은하계는 아름답다, 그러나 차갑고 크다

우리 은하는 작다, 귀엽다, 섹시, 귀여운

노래로 행복을주는, 영원한 친구 우리는

 

English I Googled Translated into Korean


	The galaxy is beautiful : but is cold and large				8/8 = 16 korean syllabic blocks
	Our galaxy is small : adorable, sexy, cute				7/8 = 15 korean syllabic blocks
	Giving happiness with song : eternal buddies we are			8/8 = 16 korean syllabic blocks

 

Notes:

  • I translated each 'phrase' (between colons) separately, I'm not sure at what granularity I should translate poetry :( 

Hey, I changed it a bit and also tried to get it as close as possible to the 16 syllable constraint (Line 1 & 2 have 16 but Line 3 has 17 :$).  

은하계는 아름답지만 차갑고 광대하다.

하지만 우리 은하는 작고 섹시고 귀엽다.

노래로 행복을 퍼뜨라; 우리 영원히 버디다.

 

Literal Translation:

The galaxy is beautiful yet cold and vast.

But our Galaxy (Eunha) is small, sexy and cute.

Spread happiness by singing; We'll be Buddies forever.

 

This should more or less have the same meaning as your original poem in English.  So just include your original + my Korean version and you'll be all g.

Let me know if you need anymore help :)

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Anticipating your Eunha Fanart !😮

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8 hours ago, Galaxy1004 said:

Hey, I changed it a bit and also tried to get it as close as possible to the 16 syllable constraint (Line 1 & 2 have 16 but Line 3 has 17 :$).  

은하계는 아름답지만 차갑고 광대하다.

하지만 우리 은하는 작고 섹시고 귀엽다.

노래로 행복을 퍼뜨라; 우리 영원히 버디다.

 

Literal Translation:

The galaxy is beautiful yet cold and vast.

But our Galaxy (Eunha) is small, sexy and cute.

Spread happiness by singing; We'll be Buddies forever.

 

This should more or less have the same meaning as your original poem in English.  So just include your original + my Korean version and you'll be all g.

Let me know if you need anymore help :)

Awesome, thanks @Galaxy1004

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I am good at making puppy noises - Eunha @ 18:15

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12 hours ago, strawberry_an_banana said:

For Eunha's birthday I'm planning on making something that will contain a kind of Korean poetry called a sijo that works in both English and Korean. Basically every line is 14-16 syllables, with each line split into two phrases.

I was hoping some Korean speakers could take a look and let me know if the poem makes sense in Korean (and seems to mean the same thing in both languages), or if there are any changes I should make to the  한글 to make it work better.

English


	The galaxy sparkles with beauty, cold in its immensity			9/7 = 16
	But our Galaxy is smol, adorable, sexy and cute				7/8 = 15
	Spreading her happiness in song, forever buddies we will be		8/8 = 16

 

Korean


은하계는 아름답다, 그러나 차갑고 크다

우리 은하는 작다, 귀엽다, 섹시, 귀여운

노래로 행복을주는, 영원한 친구 우리는

 

English I Googled Translated into Korean


	The galaxy is beautiful : but is cold and large				8/8 = 16 korean syllabic blocks
	Our galaxy is small : adorable, sexy, cute				7/8 = 15 korean syllabic blocks
	Giving happiness with song : eternal buddies we are			8/8 = 16 korean syllabic blocks

 

Notes:

  • I translated each 'phrase' (between colons) separately, I'm not sure at what granularity I should translate poetry :( 

Uh,I'm not a Korean speaker,but the translation is just so good~:BeastToss-03:

I'm really curious how it sounds like in Korean...

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Image sent! Hopefully the admins will let me know if there are any problems.

Thanks for the help, and the opportunity everybuddy! I hope she likes it, heck I hope she sees it :) 

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I am good at making puppy noises - Eunha @ 18:15

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